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Leaving is a painful process by rustymermaid Leaving is a painful process by rustymermaid
:iconscottman2th: wrote this. I think its just wonderful.

-leaving is a painful process-


Tiny threads still linger
Fractured dreams remain
Holding fast to shadows
Tasting sweet despair


wind blown leaves
mingle with dust
i stand motionless


Fractured dreams remain
Tasting sweet despair
As the memories slowly fade
Replaced by other things


ripples navigate
across the lake
reflecting sky



As the memories slowly fade
Forgetting how you feel
One more chance to turn away
Bleeding silent tears


letter burning
glowing red edge
curling ash


One more chance to turn away
No more words left to say
Bleeding silent tears
Tiny threads still linger


-note-from :iconscottman2th:

this is a shokuga also known as a woven verse using both Pantoum and haiku which alternate between each other for this form. Pantoum is a Malaysian form of poetry which is highly cyclical and structured in nature...typically this would be a collaboration between two artist but for this it was a solo project...


Background :iconalegion-stock:
Other stock my photos.
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RainReedshimmer Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Beautiful work by you and Scott.

It can be very painful letting something/someone go.....but sometimes its for the best.....

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:iconrustymermaid:
Thank you very much.
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:iconmililanimak:
love this, Barbara! :clap:
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:iconrustymermaid:
Thank you, Mak
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:iconscottman2th:
-leaving is a painful process-


Tiny threads still linger
Fractured dreams remain
Holding fast to shadows
Tasting sweet despair


wind blown leaves
mingle with dust
i stand motionless


Fractured dreams remain
Tasting sweet despair
As the memories slowly fade
Replaced by other things


ripples navigate
across the lake
reflecting sky



As the memories slowly fade
Forgetting how you feel
One more chance to turn away
Bleeding silent tears


letter burning
glowing red edge
curling ash


One more chance to turn away
No more words left to say
Bleeding silent tears
Tiny threads still linger



-note-

this is a shokuga also known as a woven verse using both Pantoum and haiku which alternate between each other for this form. Pantoum is a Malaysian form of poetry which is highly cyclical and structured in nature...typically this would be a collaboration between two artist but for this it was a solo project...
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:iconrustymermaid:
Wow! this is awesome. I would love to add it to the image.
Thank you for the info too,it's always good to learn.
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:iconscottman2th:
*grin* feel free to add it to the image...
i've been writing a lot of pantoum recently
and haiku is for me like breathing the forms
blend together rather well... i tried to make
the haiku represent the four elements wind,
water and fire with earth being emplied in
the reading. i enjoyed writing this one.
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:iconrustymermaid:
Thank you very much.
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:iconscottman2th:
you're very welcome *grin*
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:iconalecbell:
Strongly suggestive of the spirit's departure. Excellent piece!
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